Annotated Chapter 28 – Guilded Age

Annotated 28-32

Sat, 03 Oct 2020 03:10:57 +0000

I’m pretty sure that this was the most commented-upon page we ran up until the series finale. Can’t imagine why… (TBH, I expected shippers to guess at this development some pages earlier, if not at “I am spry yet”/”Oh, I know,” then at […] ↓ Read the rest of this entry...

Annotated 28-31

Fri, 02 Oct 2020 03:11:55 +0000

I had one change to this page of Phil’s: “humorless bastards” was a little off. “Humorless corpses” much more clearly conveyed that Arfa’s complaint was their cheerlessness, not their ruthlessness. The rest is just great. Arfa herself is easy enough […] ↓ Read the rest of this entry...

Annotated 28-30

Thu, 01 Oct 2020 03:19:32 +0000

At the time we wrote this, we felt like we needed a firm explanation for why Goblaurence, who was “there to be the brains,” was not in fact the leader. Don’t brains generally lead? Well, it’s a subtle distinction, but […] ↓ Read the rest of this entry...

Annotated 28-29

Wed, 30 Sep 2020 03:19:23 +0000

Time to sink that ship. Sexual desire in Guilded Age often takes a back seat to matters of more pressing importance, and in Penk and Strulk’s case, it was only ever meant to serve as a marker for who he was and […] ↓ Read the rest of this entry...

Annotated 28-28

Tue, 29 Sep 2020 03:19:18 +0000

I added roughly the second half of Harky’s speech here, addressing the conflicts of mentorship and his decision. I feel like he pretty well speaks for himself, there. Pages from a discarded draft, which emphasized strength of character more but […] ↓ Read the rest of this entry...