Comments on: Annotated 38-13

By: T

Fri, 29 Oct 2021 14:27:02 +0000

[Mourns the missed opportunity to make a “9 to 5” image gag]

By: Abnaxis

Abnaxis — Thu, 28 Oct 2021 20:00:58 +0000

Yeah if I’m 100% honest I couldn’t pick out the individual heads of houses aside from maybe Iwatani if you lined them up side-by-side. This part of the story needed either 1) much more development of the heads as characters, or 2) for the heads being removed to actually be part of a faction that had itself been characterized, for there to feel like there was any wight behind it. As it is it’s like “oh, there’s only 5 heads instead of 9 now? OK, I guess…”

By: Zak McKracken

Zak McKracken — Wed, 27 Oct 2021 23:01:57 +0000

Same here.
On the first reading, the heads of houses appeared at such great intervals that I barely remembered their faces, let alone what they were about. That is of course compounded by the fact that I’m practically dyslexic when it comes to the stuff between the lines, and that’s where these people put like 90% of the content of their communication. So I was like “oh, okay, I guess these people are removing that one guy from the council thingy, I wonder what that was about…” I felt like it should probably tell me something but it didn’t.

Reading it again, with commentary, and having at least a foggy memory of what’s coming up, I understand it’s Iwatani’s preparation for removing everyone else, too, although I am still puzzled as to why all others would go along with it. Some exposition on the plans/motives/perspectives of some of the remaining members could have helped with that, I think. Which is not so say that there wasn’t any, but it may very well have sailed right past me.

By: Blatherskite

Blatherskite — Wed, 27 Oct 2021 07:16:34 +0000

This is a very rough summary, and I might be forgetting a number of details, but quite a while back Syr’nj and crew persuaded enough of the Sky Elves that their isolation was about to end one way or another, and working with Gastonia was the only way to make sure it ended peacefully. So they went ahead and formed an alliance with Gastonia, but majority went along with that only very grudgingly.

Caneghem is a member of that majority. He’s been putting up with it, but he’s never liked it.

By: WuseMajor

WuseMajor — Tue, 26 Oct 2021 20:28:08 +0000

I’d say that, from my point of view, the reason this can feel a little slow is that, aside from Dean Reynolds, the guys that are getting shuffled off are fairly minor characters (at least in the amount of screen time they’ve been getting) and the “bloodless coup” here does lack a bit of immediacy.

Like, if Persson and Pardo had found a way to kick Itawani off the council, that might have registered as a bigger event? I dunno.