Not sure whether or not we should have done a little more with Ashok’s “tactical genius.” He doesn’t really seem to see things through the eyes of a tactician anywhere in this chapter. Before his story is through, we’ll realize that […] ↓ Read the rest of this entry…
Huh. That “We’re not gonna let POLITICS ruin this weekend” bit plays even better now to my ear. Somewhere around reading this page, I made a suggestion to Phil that he used much later in the story. You might be […] ↓ Read the rest of this entry…
John Waltrip often saved Phil or me from ourselves when the script didn’t quite make emotional sense. Example: panel 3 script here originally read, “The two of them glance at each other in a way that, flavored by just having […] ↓ Read the rest of this entry…
Amidst the battle, a brown-skinned human and a troll clash weapons fiercely. The human’s name is ASHOK, and the Troll’s name is ULAK. Since they are characters with names, it is important that they are distinct in appearance, especially as […] ↓ Read the rest of this entry…
Phil’s script: Full page spread of The Battle at Grasha-Goll, a minor skirmish in the greater theatre of war. Paint us the best tapestry of a battle you can muster with this. What follows is a long series of suggestions […] ↓ Read the rest of this entry…
