E-Merl’s dialogue is almost entirely added by Phil here (all I had was “Yeah” and then him hesitating, unsure how to follow it up). This is a clear improvement. So I’ve been thinking about Alan Moore again lately. The last […] ↓ Read the rest of this entry…
Here we explore Rachel and her motives a little more deeply and end up with a more nuanced vision of the Sisterhood, too. Was it ultimately a vehicle for Scarlett’s tyranny? Yyyeah, pretty much… but it had a lot of […] ↓ Read the rest of this entry…
I’m pretty happy with a lot of things about this chapter, and especially the first twelve pages (the ones I wrote), and especially especially the conflict between Gravedust and Rachel that kicks in here. We showed him getting on with […] ↓ Read the rest of this entry…
The last panel wasn’t direct foreshadowing, but it could have been, and I like the note of uncertainty. Honestly, the closing speech is probably a natural 20 for diplomacy by Keeper Kepfer’s standards. If nothing else, his words are going […] ↓ Read the rest of this entry…
And here we ride this running gag as far as it can possibly, possibly go. Phil came up with Scipio’s reaction (which plays on the double meaning of “tank” to suggest that he might have actually seen Frigg’s power, but […] ↓ Read the rest of this entry…
