Hmmm, the script doesn’t have the transitional panel 2 in it, with or without Phil’s revisions– the dialogue’s there, it’s just in panel 1. If that was John’s addition, I owe him thanks. I’ve talked so much about Rachel and […] ↓ Read the rest of this entry…
E-Merl’s dialogue is almost entirely added by Phil here (all I had was “Yeah” and then him hesitating, unsure how to follow it up). This is a clear improvement. So I’ve been thinking about Alan Moore again lately. The last […] ↓ Read the rest of this entry…
Here we explore Rachel and her motives a little more deeply and end up with a more nuanced vision of the Sisterhood, too. Was it ultimately a vehicle for Scarlett’s tyranny? Yyyeah, pretty much… but it had a lot of […] ↓ Read the rest of this entry…
I’m pretty happy with a lot of things about this chapter, and especially the first twelve pages (the ones I wrote), and especially especially the conflict between Gravedust and Rachel that kicks in here. We showed him getting on with […] ↓ Read the rest of this entry…
The last panel wasn’t direct foreshadowing, but it could have been, and I like the note of uncertainty. Honestly, the closing speech is probably a natural 20 for diplomacy by Keeper Kepfer’s standards. If nothing else, his words are going […] ↓ Read the rest of this entry…
