Apart from being shorter, my version of this scene put the burden of reaching Syr’Nj on different shoulders. It was a lot less on Byron to do it and a lot more on Fr’Nj. Most importantly, it had Fr’Nj asserting […] ↓ Read the rest of this entry…
Phil seriously reworked the ending from my original, adding a page to it (making this our largest chapter so far at 27 pages). He also left this note in the comments on the script: “I found the brevity of this […] ↓ Read the rest of this entry…
Fr’Nj’s reaction here is highly intriguing to me, looking back on it. She is a high druid, and we’ve treated B’ial Vezk as a one-faith state throughout, so she must believe in Graiya as her father did. What’s more, as […] ↓ Read the rest of this entry…
I think this works pretty well as a second-act turning point, for all that it’s late in an allegedly 24-page chapter to have one. You thought big bad threat was Harky with Branch, but was actually Syr’Nj with Branch! Bamboozled […] ↓ Read the rest of this entry…
I feel like this page sort of annotates itself while John Waltrip does a four-minute guitar solo. So here’s a script page from the trial sequence that, if we had followed our original plan, would’ve begun about now. It’s pretty […] ↓ Read the rest of this entry…
