Annotated 24-18
Yeah, okay, fair. It’s nice to see Rachel interacting with people who aren’t Frigg and E-Merl, and it’s nice to know she’s got the toolset to shut down this little tiff before it really gets started. You’re on the same side, you idiots!
Things are still moving forward a bit too slowly for my liking, but at least in this page they inarguably are moving forward.
That sure is a pragmatic sisterhood you’ve got there, Rachel! Sure hope they haven’t descended into radical violence and petty tyranny in your absence, but eh, I’m sure they’re fine.
This is why the argument last page didn’t feel out of character to me. Things got strained, as they do, but as soon as Rachel interrupts the tension both sides realize the frustration was getting to them.
Recruiting based on peoples individual desires doesn’t get you allies. Just mercenaries on commission.
What, you wanted friends out of a
corrupt(redundant) government body?ah yes, this is why I loved Rachel so much – she will kill you with kindness!
Death by chocolate?
I really enjoyed this whole interaction.
Not seeing much of her conflicted feelings here. She seems perfectly fine considering that she both her ass and her faith kicked last chapter.
Does seem like a little bit of whiplash. Though she could be overselling it because of how low she was feeling. Fake it til you make it, faith is acting faithful, etc.
And see, this page has the reverse feel to me: Byron is spot on, and Gravy feels awkward.
In the end, I think it balances out, and I’m not sure how else you could have written it to bring about the pivot to a sales pitch.
Cheers,
Côté
That’s a rather eclectic stack of books. I see you in there, “Leibowitz”.
…and this is the scene that worked less for me than the previous one. Dear Rachel is just stating what should be obvious after Gravy’s very direct remarks on the previous page. Some input from her would probably have been appropriate to stop the confrontation and get everyone back into thinking mode, but all important information[*] was on the table before she started speaking.
[*] the heads of houses act in self-interest, not out of compassion. So that’s the lever you need to pull.