Employee feedback, lightly salted.

We were still conscious of the fact that watching people watch things is a lot harder to make interesting than watching people do things, so we brought as much comedy as we could to this intro. This would be primarily Phil’s scene, but this page is more me.

We still weren’t aware how important Carol would become to the story, but we were starting to get there. As a result, her attitude begins to shift. She’s still snarking HR, but she’s increasingly concerned about him, and somewhat surprisingly, the story encourages the reader to relate to that concern.